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The instructors concerned with tightening wordy senesces because they don’t want their student repeat same words or sentences over and over. The Instructors need well done paper with no repeating sentences or world in it because if they repeat the word or sentences, number the paper is not going make it any sentence, number two They make the reader confuse.

this blog i posted my English 109.01 blog account

I feel sorry for Walls because she was a little girl that who don't have anybody to help her. She is the mother and a father for her family because her mom and dad were careless parents, so I really feel sorry for her.
Walls feel bad for herself because her dad lie to her and he told her that he going to build a glass castle but he never did, and one time he give Walls a man and he get money from the guy. He cares money more than his child. She really feel bad because her dad don't care about her and he lie to her

blog 13

She tells her dad that she doesn’t believe in the glass castle anymore because her dad promises that he building a glass castle when she was young and he never did. Then when she tried to move out, he stopping her and tell her the same thing he told her when she was young and he said to her again ”I’m still working on building the glass castle”. I don’t think he will build because he doesn’t have money. To build glass castle is a lot of money because he said it’ll be a hell of a better than any other apartment she ever find in New York City, so build that house he have to have a lot of money I don’t think he have that money. This is so important for the book because this show us that her dad is a liar and he never do the promises he said he will do it.

blog 11

Yes he let her down when he told her he was going to finish the Glass Castle. He used it to pour the trash since they couldn’t pay for the trash pick-up. He told her he was going to finish the Glass castle, but he didn’t live up to that. She was disappointed because she really felt like she worked hard and put a lot of effort into it.

pages 155 to 158

I read the pages 155 to 158 before I read the blog assignment but I reread it and time it myself. It took me 11 minutes to read it. I think it could took me longer than 11 minutes if I didn’t read it before because I’m slow reader, I took my time when I’m reading because I want to understand every sentence while I’m reading, and I think that’s what makes me so slow reader.

Jeannette mom

Jeannette her mom was not a good mom. She didn’t care about her children because Jeannette when she was 3 years old she used to cook food because her mom didn't cook food for her, so she have to cook food for herself. We don’t usually see 3 years old cook, but Jeannette was a cook because she didn’t had a good mom who can take care of her. So one day she was cooking a hot dog and she burn herself because she was a litter girl and she don’t know how to cook that well. After when Jeannette get old her mom was not change she was still care less mom and even this time she seem is like she is homeless like Jeannette said, she probably looked like any of the thousands of homeless people in New York City. What she means about this is now her mom she doesn’t even care herself, because she saw her mom around the dumpster and she was not looking normal.

two biggest issues

The two biggest issues that I had in my first paper is less explanation. I have good points but I didn’t explain every well so readers will have some questions about the topic because I didn’t explain enough. For example my first paragraph when I said “The first time I looked at the advertisement, the first thing that I saw was a text that read” readers may say what advertisement he talking about. So how I can make it clear on this paragraph is to tell what kind of advertisement I’m talking about which is the Honda advertisement. The second biggest issues I had are quotation mark I get a lot text from the advertisement but I didn’t use the quotation. For example zero down payment, zero security deposit, zero first-month payment, and zero due at lease signing. After I wrote this I should put the quotation mark because I get this from the advertisement, and I will put those quotations in there.